History_4

[Eustace]

well, it will definitely be in the next episode)))

okay, let’s write it in the episode! Yes?

[Denach]

Natali_Natali, so to speak, has fully entered into adulthood)
Do you want to try to find her on the internet and just chat with her in a good way?

[Eugene123]

Very cool story) I liked reading it) you should make a collection of your stories)

[Christmas_Christmas]

Very cool story) I liked reading)

thanks for the review

[Didudo]

Great stories, beautifully written)

[Christmas_Christmas]

Excellent stories, beautifully written)

Thank you very much for your feedback... and I already wrote History_5.... I hope you like it too

[Ahah]

In the summer I really liked going to see Tanya’s grandmother. My friends and I lived, so to speak, in the center of the city...

I started reading from story 5, then 3, got to the 4th.
It just inspired me with nostalgia...
*********
Childhood is a golden, fun time,
Mom of the window washes and calls home from the yard.
Golden childhood is leaving, so be it.
My heart aches from pain:
Shut up, shut up, I won’t come back...
THE ENTIRE SONG IS HERE

[Hair shirt]

damn funny... I’m not yet at that age to write "memoirs")))))
just kidding...

Read Kuprin. He is a master of writing stories and novels that at first glance are about nothing. But in his stories and tales everything always comes down to fucking. What I really thought was interesting to my contemporaries-readers. But he wrote about the banal in a very interesting and exciting way.
You were smiling at your thoughts in your story right now. But we don’t know how to read them, and when you read this text of yours about this city, you complete it in your imagination because you remember it. But we have nothing to finish drawing with - we don’t know how to read your thoughts. And there is a gap in the presentation of the essence of what is happening.

You read your text, and you feel good, as if you walked into a warm pool in the evening after sunset. But the reader does not have such a feeling because he was not there in your city. Turgenev, they say, was a master at describing the environment - re-read Bezhin Meadow. But no matter how hard you try, it is impossible to convey in text everything that can be seen with the eyes and felt. Therefore, when describing something, I think you should still not get too carried away with your thoughts about describing the surrounding situation, but you must not forget why you are describing all this in detail.

Well, yes, you took it upon yourself to say something to describe what is around, but it’s all about the environment, creating an atmosphere, preparing the reader for something that you want to present.
I’m not a writer, and right now I’m not teaching you how to write. I am simply expressing my thoughts about your text. You wanted someone to appreciate it.
So I’m writing about it.

Your text seemed to be suspended. You prepared the reader for something, and then you took it and called it a day. And the reader asks - so what, is that all? Why did you describe all this? He was waiting for you to finally put out what you wanted to say and he was a little perplexed.

P.S.
Stephen King wrote a story where he outlined in detail the technique of writing his works. In the sense that not exactly horror films, but simply in this story he described in detail the process of writing his works. Perhaps you would be interested in reading how a person approached writing texts from the point of view of the production process.
Google it, I don’t remember exactly the name of this story, but I think it’s not difficult to find.

[Christmas_Christmas]

I started reading from story 5, then 3, got to the 4th.
It just inspired me with nostalgia...

thank you for the review)))

[Happens]

The number of ellipses makes the text difficult to read.
Fans are heroes.

[Christmas_Christmas]

The number of ellipses makes the text difficult to read.
Fans are heroes.

I repeat once again... I don’t even put periods wondering why... the fingers themselves "beat them off"..
And yes, there is probably "something there"... I am sure that a psychiatrist would have already diagnosed me....
and yes, I know that "damaged".... and damn it’s not "points"... I would have something to worry about..
and yes, I It’s a pity if people have a hard time reading my text because of those dots...

Only I won’t "correct", and the dots will appear both in my Stories and simply in my remarks on the forum...
and dear It happens, I’m not chasing “fame”... well, on purpose... I don’t hide the fact that I’m pleased that people read my stories and like them... But if you manage to write better.. .. then with the best feelings I will put my “like” under your Story and write you a sincere comment in your support.... well, I’ll stop writing myself....

nas I always say... no offense and nothing personal... just a remark and nothing more

[Eustace]

I will put my "like" under your Story

what a Like!!! Dots!!! need to put

Well, I won’t stop writing.............................. ................

[Christmas_Christmas]

what a Like!!! Dots!!! I need to put

dammit... well, that means I’ll put "like dots"...

[Eustace]

damn... well, then I’ll put "like dots"...

Yum

[Canis91]

From bl... (Flour product), do you want checkers or go?
They don’t like dots. To hell with them, with the dots... The author is squeezing anti-resistance, and the rest of us are an army (who understands).
Author Peshi ischo

[Fargal94]

Alesya, Girl, it’s not customary for us to be so rude. You’ve been here for a year or a week and haven’t shown yourself to be anything good. If you don’t like it, just don’t read it!

[Canis91]

Alesya, wow, how uncultured
If you don’t like it, get out of the door(ts).

[Alesya]

Look, I don’t like the stuffed animal))(((

[Eustace]

With a friend together, when we do a blowjob, the same turns on a lot

You’d better go or (Shol) with your friend to continue sucking!!!

[Canis91]

For some...
He shouted: There’s a mistake here.
I’m the Jew...
And they told him: It’s not very good here,
Get out of the door. ..

[Fargal94]

You don’t have enough authority on the site and life experience for anyone to be interested in your opinion about the author and her works. Go outside to make a scandal.

[Canis91]

https://i.postimg.cc/Gmg7Fqbf/i.jpg
Вот вам история леденящая кровь.
Я по соседский зашел его проведать.
Увлек меня он в гущу сада,
Сорвал с меня одежды и был таков... (Ц) но не точная)

Отправлено спустя 2 минуты 54 секунды:
Ну и по традиции, дабы убрать негатив от некоторых товарищей (не с нашего района)

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[Canis91]

Damn, when I read History... For some reason, “History O” is in my head. Apparently the subconscious is triggered...
To the author of kisses and flores

[Christmas_Christmas]

Alex_, Fargal94, Canis91,
thank you so much for the support... But I have already decided not to pay attention to such characters as man who writes me such things

Scarecrow, go to hell with your stories

first of all, just from this man’s one line, you can immediately see his “deep inner world” and the culture of communication" ....
not only will I not respond to such remarks, I will simply ignore such a person... if there was at least something of substance... and so from Because there is nothing to say, a person simply resorts to personal insults....

[Christmas_Christmas]

For some reason I have "The Story of O" in my head

damn... I read "The Story of O" in 14 years old)))) I found a book in my dad’s hiding place and read it in one night))) well, almost overnight.. Probably it was from that night that I developed a desire and interest in such things as "submission".. and not only

[Canis91]

Natali_Natali, it turns out we are fellow sufferers I read it later when I was 18 years old. But that’s where the passion for all kinds of BDSM comes from. Current "top".

[Christmas_Christmas]

Natali_Natali, it turns out we are fellow sufferers I read it later when I was 18 years old. But that’s where the passion for all kinds of BDSM comes from. Current "top".

damn... and I understand why you are "top"... because in the book all the male heroes were "top" .... well, the main character was a “bottom”... so I read it and imagined myself in her place))))

[Canis91]

Natali_Natali, so this is like the first experience... How some sport....
I had a friend who was a boxer. Lavrov was not enough. And he was an eternal sparring partner. And he liked it.

[Hair shirt]

Alesya, Girl, it’s not customary for us to be so rude. You’ve been here for a year or a week and haven’t shown yourself to be anything good. If you don’t like it, just don’t read it!

So what do you fit in? Are you a moderator here, or maybe the owner of the resource? Or have you appointed yourself as the dominant male here? Actually, following your logic, you need to follow your own advice - "If you don’t like it, just don’t read it!"
And it is not your responsibility to treat here and indicate who should do what or not do it. We didn’t appoint you in charge here. And this means that there is no need to tell anyone here what they should not do.

Sent after 1 minute 56 seconds:

You don’t have enough authority on the site and life experience for anyone to be interested in your opinion about the author and her works. Go out into the street to make a scandal.

Here we go again! Who are you to build someone here?

[Canis91]

Listen. Why did I think... Was there a photo with a white sofa and 7 afros? Natalie is freaking alone... There are three of us (less than on ma’am, but...). Well, we finally understand....Ali, like, throw Snow White???...
I’m joking, that is, I’m playing around (c).

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I’m like this...
Too about the kidneys don’t hit (curled up and covered his head with his hands).
https://i.postimg.cc/WzSnTLwX/i-1.jpg

[Hair shirt]

I once heard an interesting idea somewhere - you need to communicate with people who are more successful than you. Because they won’t envy you. Because your successes will not annoy them. Because these people will try to help you and not spoil you. Because they will not express themselves at your expense.

And so I was once in the company of similar people, well, those who are more successful than me. And I still remember this conversation. I shared my feelings about some problems with my small little toy business. And not even a business, but simply self-employment. And the man who listened to me smiled so kindly and said - I went through this once.

I am writing this because you should not publish your stories here. Here you will collect only praise and it will not give you any benefit. And you will get absolutely nowhere. You need to show your texts to those who work with texts. Ideally, these should be some kind of editors, either in the editorial office or in a publishing house.
And it would be simply ideal if it were some kind of active journalist working somewhere. Or a writer or publicist who is published.

In one of his autobiographical works, Valentin Kataev described how he went and took lessons from Bunin. This was before the revolution. They both lived in Odessa and Kataev, as a young officer in the tsarist army, wrote stories. And he wore and showed them to Bunin. And at that time he was already a famous writer. And judging by Kataev’s subsequent writing career, these lessons benefited him.

Regarding professional reviewers of your texts. Be prepared that no one will ever praise you. You won’t wait. Judge how good or bad your texts are by how much or little they scold you. If a lot means really bad. If they don’t scold very much, then it’s not bad, but it could be much better.
But in any case, you need to start with this, and not with collecting applause from those who cannot connect two words, and who do not have enough strength to read longreads to the end.

[Fargal94]

Alesya, Girl, it’s not customary for us to be so rude. You’ve been here for a year or a week and haven’t shown yourself to be anything good. If you don’t like it, just don’t read it!

So what do you fit in? Are you a moderator here, or maybe the owner of the resource? Or have you appointed yourself as the dominant male here? Actually, following your logic, you need to follow your own advice - "If you don’t like it, just don’t read it!"
And it is not your responsibility to treat here and indicate who should do what or not do it. We didn’t appoint you in charge here. And this means that there is no need to tell anyone here what they should not do.

Sent after 1 minute 56 seconds:

You don’t have enough authority on the site and life experience for anyone to be interested in your opinion about the author and her works. Go out into the street to make a scandal.

Here we go again! Who are you to build anyone here?

I’m not bothering you with your kilometer-long rants and you don’t poke your nose into my affairs Just send a girl for what she does, especially for a young girl, well, she just doesn’t eat well. I like what Natalie is doing

[Eustace]

I’m not bothering you with your kilometer deductions and don’t stick your nose into my affairs. Simply sending a girl for what she does, especially for a young girl, is simply not good. I like what Natalie does

forget it. Google what Volosyanitsa is! And you yourself will understand. What a stuffy guy! Read Wikipedia, they’ll tell you there.

[Fargal94]

I’m not bothering you with your kilometer deductions and don’t stick your nose into my affairs. Just sending a girl for what she does, especially for a young girl, is simply not good. I like what Natalie does

forget it. Google what Volosyanitsa is! And you yourself will understand. What a stuffy guy! Read Wikipedia, they’ll tell you there.

yes, I got a little wound up. No one has ever sent anyone like this before, especially for no reason

[Hair shirt]

Yes, I got a little wound up. In our country, no one has ever sent anyone like that, especially for no reason

The childhood disease of all forums in my memory is characters like you. Which, together with a dozen like you, are capable of flushing any successful project down the toilet. The fact is that visitors like you usually ask to become moderators. And from now on the forum is fucked. This is about the same as having an angry dog ​​- it will bark at everyone it sees and bite everyone it can reach. And as a result, everyone will pass by. And after some time the forum will fold, because the forum needs traffic, and not these kings of the hill to whom God did not give horns. And who, due to a lack of horns offline, try to butt everyone online.

[Christmas_Christmas]

Yes, I got a little wound up. In our country, no one has ever sent anyone like that, especially for no reason

The childhood disease of all forums in my memory is characters like you. Which, together with a dozen like you, are capable of flushing any successful project down the toilet. The fact is that visitors like you usually ask to become moderators. And from now on the forum is fucked. This is about the same as having an angry dog ​​- it will bark at everyone it sees and bite everyone it can reach. And as a result, everyone will pass by. And after some time the forum will fold, because the forum needs traffic, and not these kings of the hill to whom God did not give horns. And who, due to the lack of horns offline, try to butt everyone online.

dear hair shirt, I just don’t understand why you’re trying to spam my thread? you saw what

I don’t like the stuffed animal))(((

you came to my topic almost immediately after her post . not this one, which she did not have time to delete, but the post in which she calls me Scarecrow and MAT kicks me out of the forum....
I didn’t ask the forum members, but they supported me.. thank you so much and Fargal94, and Alex_, and Canis91,
it turns out that you came to my topic under the nickname Alesya, they sent me obscenities from the forum, not even from the topic, but from the forum in general... and now they have returned under the nickname hair shirt, and as if nothing had happened you continue to spam my topic?


as I always say... no offense and nothing personal... just thinking out loud

[Eustace]

fucking Stuffy appeared, that’s not a post, then fucking Melancholy and some kind of Ass!!!



https://i.postimg.cc/W1jZpsWp/2024-01-16-221824.jpg

[Christmas_Christmas]

fucking Stuffy appeared,

no need to do that... no need to insult anyone ((((. and why.... dear Vasyanitsa, has the same right to write on the forum as I do like you and like any other forum member..
only it’s better to write to me openly.... and not go under the nickname Alesya, who at that time had only 6 DAYS of "forum experience" kick me out of the forum with obscenities, and then return respected Sackcloth, and pretend that "not in the aisles" that he won’t understand what other forums had in mind, speaking to Alesya,

and if I’m wrong, it wasn’t you under this nickname, dear Vsyanitsa, then now I apologize to you in front of everyone....
but what I wrote in support of Fargal94, you were damn outraged to the core, and the fact that Alesya, OBVIOUSLY kicks me out of the forum, for some reason you are not outraged...
you have some kind of double standards for decency, don’t you think...
once again, nothing personal.. just a remark

[Eustace]

Natali_Natali, from Nick alone, it seems to me that I I’ve already landed in the Underworld, and after reading the posts on the forum I’m starting to look around, looking for Devils!!!

[Canis91]

https://i.postimg.cc/vZTGSSxf/1648089556-45-kartinkin-net-p-kartinki-otkritoe-okno-52.jpg
Это просто окно... (Вы понимаете о чём я).
И да - все добра и хорошего настроения (ц).

Отправлено спустя 17 минут 14 секунд:

начинаю озиратся, Чертей искать!!!

, таких?

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[Hair shirt]

All this mouse fuss with other nicknames is boring and not interesting to me. Why?
I don’t play with all these rattles. I don’t need this at all.
Every time I myself want to finally stop writing something on this forum due to a catastrophic lack of time.
I just feel sorry for wasting all this time.
nAnd you say that I went somewhere under some nickname and wrote something back to someone.
This is just bullshit.

Pushkin also wrote to someone in his letters that do not seek good from good. This quote of his was still in the Meeting Place and cannot be changed during Fox’s interrogation.
I read your works and saw the problem. I thought to myself - I also went through this once. And I wrote to you about it.
It’s clear that you didn’t like it. It’s clear that you would like it more if I wrote that your texts are awesome and stuff like that.
But this is a road to nowhere. It ends when you, treated kindly by the unprofessional public, finally come with your texts to the professionals and they open your eyes by naming their real price.

And this is a death sentence for you. Because everyone praised you, but then they took you and scolded you. Moreover, they not only scolded us, but also joked, and someone even said that it was even a shame to show it to someone. Therefore, you need to show your texts to professionals first. And the sooner the better. This is what I wrote to you about above, mentioning Kataev, who submitted his stories for review not to just anyone, but to the whole Bunin. And it was a very correct decision on his part.

Authors are usually very sensitive about editing and reviews of their texts. Personally, I have a huge callus in this place and the editors have killed any painful reaction in me to editing my texts. I just don’t give a fuck who says anything about what I wrote. But the whole subtlety is that at the same time you must have some kind of authority in writing texts. There must be someone who is a standard for you and whom you trust and whose reviews you are not offended and do not think that he simply does not like you for something and therefore scolds you. That is, you must be one hundred percent sure that he is objective.

Well, then everything is simple - he edits your texts without sparing you and without trying to please you. And it tells you what really is about your texts. That is, if it sucks, then he says that it sucks! And he says why and most importantly, he says how to avoid it. And it’s better to post your texts to the public court after the professionals stop scolding you very much.

In short...
Bring your texts to the professionals.
There is such an institute named after Gorky. They teach to be writers there. Although I’m not sure if this can be taught. But one way or another, such a university exists. And I think that you can find a tutor who, say, prepares you for admission to this university. And I think it is this tutor who needs to show your texts and listen to what he has to say.
And first choose a tutor who himself works as a teacher at this university.
And this will be the right decision. And this will be better than receiving applause from tractor drivers and saleswomen.
I don’t want to offend anyone, but everyone should mind their own business. And it will probably be right that the tractor driver does not need to undertake a professional evaluation of texts.

[Eustace]

I’ll go shoot myself!!! Goodbye Darling Natali_Natali,

[Christmas_Christmas]

I’m going to shoot myself!!! Goodbye Beloved Natali_Natali,

damn... and I’m in this topic The most hated actors, singers from the USSR and after was about to jump out of the window(((
today is probably some kind of bad day

[Canis91]

Alex_, from a slingshot?
Don’t do this. It’s better to listen to one smart thought, don’t be offended.
It means our landowner Kurochkin was shot. I loaded the pistol, raised it to my temple, pulled the trigger.
And it misfired. He does it again. And again it misfired...
In general, he sold the gun. And the gun was expensive. With stones.
Well, that means he sold it and went to the tavern to wash the deal. Yes...
In the tavern I overdid it to celebrate. Went home. And it was winter.
It so happened that he fell into a snowdrift and froze. Kysmet.

[Eustace]

Canis91, I’m gone!!! I’m already in Purgatory! Hairy Man drove me there

[Canis91]

I’m already in Purgatory!

Only the flames of hell will dry our tears...
Oh, Madonna, accept his soul.
I grieve, brother...
And the pioneers of Era will salute the Boy.

[Eustace]

damn... and in this thread I was going to jump out of the window(((

meet me in Purgatory

[Canis91]

Natali_Natali, No need to go out of the window. But what you really need is a glass - another vodka with a hot and spicy appetizer.
Pickled mushrooms, pickles, pressed red caviar on ice.
And in a separate hot sausages in a spicy tomato sauce in a saucepan.
The vodka should be cold in a steamed decanter. The glasses should also be chilled.

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meet you in Purgatory

, will you have some vodka?
Another piece of black bread with green onions and a Baltic keleka on top... Mmmm... Think about it .

[Eustace]

Another piece of black bread with a green onion and a Baltic kilka on top... Mmmm... Think

I’ll ask for an hour off now!!! I haven’t submitted my documents yet!

[Canis91]

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Отправлено спустя 4 минуты 50 секунд:
Ну тады... Погнали.
За отсутствующих здесь дам(куда-то наша добрая хозяйка запропастилась).
Фух и ням ням(выпивает рюмку и смачно хрустя лучком закусывает)

Отправлено спустя 5 минут 49 секунд:
Сибиряк89, присоединяйся, брат. У нас ещё есть.

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Первой голову свернём
И по кружкам разольём
Выпьем, крякнем и закурим
Тихо песенку споём.