You - for me, I - for you. Story, part 1.

[Eustace]

what a fool, but he could live!((

may carry

[Tapkin]

I don’t get a vacation

))) Why don’t you get a vacation? Were you taken into slavery?))) or are you a workaholic?

..firstly, I’m greedy for money, secondly, I live by the sea, thirdly They promised a bunch of days off every month... in general, I’m almost in chocolate, so why the hell do I need a vacation?!

[Tapkin]

what a fool, but he could have lived!((

may carry

..don’t even dream!)))

[Eustace]

to the sucker! Balabol gives us money for free! A hundred Greens! Marinka agreed yesterday!

[Tapkin]

to the sucker! Balabol gives us money for free! A hundred Greens! Marinka agreed yesterday!

will you also work together?

[Eustace]

will you also work together?

it gives! You know Marinka! I probably already submitted a house today, I should ask Marinka, I should have taken out a loan!

[Bully Carrie]

Hooligan, Fargal, don’t speak unkindly.

Stop it, please! There will always be envious people. Detractors too. Bright authors always have haters, this is not news. Haters gonna hate. To leave means to indulge them. Don’t go! It’s interesting to be with you, and you know it.

[Eustace]

Don’t go! It’s interesting with you

he doesn’t seem to go anywhere.

[Bully Carrie]

Don’t go! It’s interesting with you

he doesn’t seem to be going anywhere.

I would like to. But he writes "do not remember it ill"

[Tapkin]

will you also work together?

it gives! You know Marinka! I probably already submitted a house today, I should ask Marinka, I should have taken out a loan!

...what a dubious idea, it smacks of an adventure)))
. .look, you’ll definitely end up in slavery as a couple!

[Eustace]

I would like to. But he writes "don’t remember unkindly"

are you talking about Vadik?

[Bully Carrie]

I would like to. But he writes "don’t remember unkindly"

are you talking about Vadik?

I’m talking about the starter topic. Who are you talking about?

[Eustace]

I’m talking about the starter topic. Who are you talking about?

yes, there is a mass farewell here Vadik, he also said goodbye somewhere in some topic. Yeah, wait for the TS to leave! Every now and then someone says goodbye...

[Venus]

Eustace, ))) The hooligan got it wrong. He sent me there, and she thought that he left on his own))) he is a very interesting character and sends me naturally. Envious people. This is apparently because it is so bright.

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secondly, I live by the sea

))) Ahah. You live by the sea and are silent about it?))) and don’t invite people to visit you

[Hair shirt]

))) They say that anyone can offend an artist, let alone teach a graphomaniac. But in this case, I agree with you 100%.
I can’t say anything good about the author, as a person, as a person. Sneaky guy. He has been in my emergency situation for a long time and the story is really crap. He writes in a formulaic and crooked manner, but if you saw the pictures he posts, you would understand that the man has no taste at all, even for words.
And despite this, he writes, he tries, so be with him next time be lenient)))

Inept and clumsy creativity is usually forgiven only to children. For adults, this head start is no longer there. And what is written and or played, it is either something worthy, or just some kind of inept, crooked craft.

I believe that if you take on something, you must first put in the work to learn how to do it . And you don’t have to take it upon yourself to, say, sing and climb onto the stage and howl in a bad voice. Well, if you still really want to, then you must first learn notation, then hire a tutor and learn solfeggio. And then, having learned solfeggio, and go and take vocal lessons from someone.
Vysotsky, Mironov, Nikulin, Karachentsev, Boyarsky...
They all had absolutely no voice, and no vocal skills data. But they took vocal lessons and learned to hit the notes, and as a result, they did very poorly.

It’s the same with the lyrics. If you really really want to write, then put in the work and go somewhere where they will teach you how to do it. For example, to some of the most seedy editorial offices. Come there and express your desire to do something for them for free, for a fee at least twice a week. They will give tasks and then edit YOUR texts. And you can’t send people to the editorial office just like that. Like I’m an artist, I see it that way. You are not an artist, but you are just a lazy slacker who for some reason decided that he can take on this or that writing.

Although I think that this or that lazy graphomaniac understands everything perfectly well and only does it for himself exception. For example, he won’t take his car to be repaired by some mechanic, who will just say that today is his first day, and that he doesn’t understand cars at all. And right now he will be repairing the car using videos from YouTube.
Because this graphomaniac is not a fool. But apparently he considers his readers fools if he himself undertakes to write something without the difficulty of learning how to do it.

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who defends pedophiles in the next thread.

Who are you talking about?

[Venus]

Vyanitsa, ))) You just don’t know TS. He has a very inflated sense of self-importance and very limited intellectual abilities. Among people like him who are limited, it’s completely unnoticeable))) but you’re not like that. Therefore you see.

[Hair shirt]

You just don’t know the vehicle. He has a very inflated sense of self-importance and very limited intellectual abilities. Among people like him who are limited, it’s completely unnoticeable))) but you’re not like that. Therefore, you see.

Yes, I don’t need all these rattles - to be friends with someone against someone.
I don’t know this author and I don’t have there are no prejudices towards him. And I didn’t want to kick him in a special way and hurt him more painfully.
I absolutely don’t care who exactly wrote this text.
It’s just that this text is clumsy and hand-made. For example, I don’t know how to play the piano. But anyway, let’s say I sit down at the piano right now and start banging on the keys. And at the same time, to say that I’m the specialist doing this, that’s how it was intended. It’s the same with this erotic story of his.

Again, every other line, this direct speech is everywhere. This is the first sign that a person does not know how to connect cases; it is difficult for him. He constantly stumbles upon tautology. He understands this and begins to translate the text supposedly into some kind of dialogue between someone and someone.

In general, I would advise the author of this opus to watch an interesting film with Sean Connery on this topic. I’ll give you a link right now.
In this film, one black boy showed literary promise. And he fucked up with a professional writer.
And in order to get away from him, he told him to write twenty pages on the topic FUCK YOU.
Sit down right now and write twenty pages on the topic FUCK YOU. Weak!?
You need to start learning to write from this, and not from dialogues in porn stories.

The film is called "Find Forrester"
Here is the link - You need to register to see the link.

[Venus]

Yes, I don’t need all these rattles - to be friends with someone against someone.

))) Ahah. Well, if you are not friends against someone, then why teach the author? You see that he appreciates your advice))) In addition, his friends consider the author talented, and you and I are envious. You are wasting your time. At least I took revenge, repaid the debt to him, but why do you need this?

[Hair shirt]

))) Ahah. Well, if you are not friends against someone, then why teach the author? You see that he appreciates your advice))) In addition, his friends consider the author talented, and you and I are envious. You are wasting your time. At least I took revenge, repaid the debt to him, but why do you need this?

First of all, the author cares. I know this for sure. Secondly, he will take all this into account what I wrote.
And he is very interested in this reaction of mine to his work. And I also know this for sure.
He saw my previous posts and he understands that you scolded him and I scolded him - these are two different things.
He may not even be offended by you, and it’s true will think that you are simply taking revenge on him for something.

To receive a review from a person who, at the very least, somehow connects the cases on paper. And for him it is valuable that he does not speak.
Yes, it is painful. Yes, it’s unpleasant.
But when appendicitis is removed, it is also painful and unpleasant. But there is no choice - either you will die from sepsis, or they will rip your stomach open.

Here it is. Or you will continue to do some kind of leftist crap thinking that you are a genius.
Or you will really somehow change your attitude towards your writing and take something into account and maybe you will write better and more interesting.
Something like this...

And I will repeat again...
I have no personal prejudices towards the author. I don’t really give a damn who he is.

[Venus]

))) Ahah. Well, if you are not friends against someone, then why teach the author? You see that he appreciates your advice))) In addition, his friends consider the author talented, and you and I are envious. You are wasting your time. At least I took revenge, repaid the debt to him, but why do you need this?

First of all, the author cares. I know this for sure. Secondly, he will take all this into account what I wrote.
And he is very interested in this reaction of mine to his work.
He saw my previous posts and he understands that you scolded him and I scolded him - these are different things.
He may not even be offended by you and will actually think that you are simply taking revenge on him for something.

Get a review from a person who, at the very least, cases are still connected on paper. And for him it is valuable that he does not speak.
Yes, it is painful. Yes, it’s unpleasant.
But when appendicitis is removed, it is also painful and unpleasant. But there is no choice - either you will die from sepsis, or they will rip your stomach open.

Here it is. Or will you continue to pull out some kind of leftist bullshit, I think that you are a genius. Or will you really somehow change your attitude towards your writing and take something into account and begin to write better and more interesting.
Something like this...

And once again I repeat... I have no personal prejudices towards the author. I don’t really give a damn who he is.

))) Ahaha. But, if you are serious, then I don’t agree with you here))) Yes, I really took advantage of the moment to take revenge. I was biased towards the story. Not even that. I didn’t care about the story at all. I read it only to make sure that it was written crookedly, and if I had read it, it would have been just like a story. An unknown author, a graphomaniac, not a professional, it was written coolly.
Don’t compare creative people with surgeons, auto mechanics and other professions that require professionalism. In creativity, studying with a professional can play a cruel joke on the student. The student may begin to copy the teacher.
TS wrote for this site. Not for literary purposes. For friends.
When you play the guitar in the yard, it is enough to know only 4 chords and with these chords you can play any song and it will be soulful, both for friends and for the people around you. Not professionals.
No one performed surgery here. The author has no intention of becoming a professional. He writes for himself, for friends and for all those who liked it.

[Go ahead]

hair shirt,

And for those who have active life position, I would advise less indicating who should do or not do what.

[Venus]

Rainmaker, ))) Ahah. No offense. Write a sequel. Your story is fine. From where you sent me, everyone understood that our “love” is mutual))) I won’t criticize your work anymore, and to be honest, there’s nothing for it. I like non-professional stories.

[Christmas_Christmas]

are you scolding the author of the story?... why? The person wrote it because he could, as he “sees” it... he liked it... someone didn’t like it... that’s the way it should be... but why criticize? We are not an editorial board and we do not have an artistic council, which we assembled to “brand” the author....
here they don’t criticize, but read....

[Hair shirt]

TS wrote for this site. Not for literary purposes. For friends.

Either you can sing or you can’t. Either you can play the piano passably or you can’t.
And it doesn’t depend on who you sing or play for. Either you know how to do it or not.
And if you don’t know how, then you howl in a bad voice for anyone. And in the same way you play poorly. You constantly get confused, hit the wrong notes...

My brother once completed eight grades in piano. All this happened in front of me - endless scales, and solfeggio with conducting and singing notes from a sheet of music. He had no vocal abilities. When he entered the university, his parents gave him a good expensive guitar with nylon strings for some celebration.
And he became a hiker during his studies and gained great popularity for singing camp songs with a guitar.

I learned to play the guitar from a sheet of music and not through three chords. I also learned songs from the sheet music of a particular song. And it turned out to be so fucking amazing that he really was a very big success. But there’s a lot of work behind all this! And I know all this because it all happened before my eyes.
Nothing just happens, behind every well-done job there is a lot of work and a lot of time spent on it.

But there are exceptions. The name of this phenomenon is talent in a certain area. And everything that a person achieves is not thanks to, but in spite of.
And if in spite of then it’s true talent. That is, let’s say the child is five years old and he already reads and writes and counts, and has read all the children’s books in the house. This is talent.
Because in spite of it. Because not thanks to, but in spite of.

That is, this child was not taught anything for many hours a day, he did everything on his own. And they are contrary to these abilities of his. That is, he should not be able to do all this at the age of five according to all medical indicators. All this is contrary.
And we’ll say the same with music. Let’s say a person learned to play the piano well as a joke. And I didn’t spend much time on it. And he didn’t finish music school. And he doesn’t even know how to read music. That is, he doesn’t know how to read from a sheet of music.

But somehow the fuck sits down and performs Beethoven’s Moonlight Sonata for almost five-plus minutes. So I sat down and just started playing from memory. He didn’t lie a single note, he never faltered once. With feeling and arrangement, in the right key and at the right tempo.
And then he asks - what is this!?
Yes, this is talent!

And so It is in this property of human nature that there lies a setup for graphomaniacs and those who climb onto the stage and shout there in a bad voice.
People believe that they have talent and sincerely believe in it. And those around them, not wanting to make an enemy, do not tell these people the truth.
Because they know that they will immediately pour a bucket of shit on them and then you will be recorded as an enemy and like you are jealous.
This is how it always happens.

But sooner or later, there is someone more or less authoritative who tells this supposed talent what his work is.
This happens when a person either wants to go somewhere, or brings his texts to a publishing house somewhere. And it’s hard to accuse editors at a publishing house of bias. And that’s what they tell the author - that what you brought is complete bullshit.

Well, maybe not in that form and in those words. Perhaps they are simply saying that we are not interested. And if they don’t add anything to it later, it means that what you brought is truly complete crap. If it’s half crap, they can tell you why and what you need to pay attention to.
If you liked the text but it just doesn’t suit them, then they’ll advise where to put it.
But if it’s complete crap, they won’t comment at all, they’ll simply refuse .

But on the forums, collecting likes and warming your pride is the last thing.
All adults, no one wants to make an extra enemy out of nowhere.

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are you scolding the author of the story?. .. For what? The person wrote it because he could, as he “sees” it... he liked it... someone didn’t like it... that’s how it should be... But why criticize? We are not an editorial board and we do not have an artistic council, which we assembled to “brand” the author....
here they don’t criticize the damn thing, but read it....

I haven’t bothered to comment on your texts yet...

I just don’t want you to pour a bucket of poop on my head . Because that’s how it will be, as soon as I do it.
If with male authors you can still somehow hope for adequacy in the reviews of texts, then I think it’s better not to touch female authors at all.

[Venus]

not through three chords

Not three, four chords. There are enough of them.

Collecting likes and boosting your pride is the last thing.

Maybe he likes likes.

[Christmas_Christmas]

It is I who have not yet undertaken to comment on your texts...

Why comment on them? I wrote them primarily for myself..... probably it was I who needed to remember my childhood.... I didn’t “tell” so much... I mean what is not related to sex... .
but that was then... and now I’ve generally lost interest in my Stories... absolutely... I no longer “see” the pictures before my eyes when I write... t
What’s the point? you can safely start criticizing... at least mix it with g@vnom... mix it with this too... it’s very easy, you don’t even need any special effort for this....
only I don’t care anymore. ..

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n

well, yes, only Natulechetny!!!

))) Ahaha. Your Natulechka will return)))) she won’t stay there for long. Don’t worry.

damn... I just noticed... is this about me?... if so. then where should I return from? I’m still “warm” thank God.. I’m already better and the temperature has dropped to 38))))....

[Venus]

where should I return from?

Ah, weren’t you the one who posted the story?

[Christmas_Christmas]

then where should I come back from?

Are you the one who posted the story?

no.. I wrote here here. that I haven’t registered there, and I don’t intend to yet

[Venus]

that I haven’t registered there, and I don’t intend to yet

There is a forum member, a user with your ava, who posted a story the day before yesterday. I thought it was you. They acted vilely

[Christmas_Christmas]

that I haven’t registered there, and I don’t intend to yet

There is a forum member, a user with your ava, who posted a story the day before yesterday. I thought it was you. They acted vilely

I just looked at it myself... and my ava and the forum experience is wow... I didn’t even know about that forum then. .. even "Canada" is indicated like where I live... but that’s not me....
I have my own opinion, why all the fuss was there, with the erroneous registration of my account on 4alla.. .. then I decided that I was really paranoid... now, I’m sure that I did the right thing, that I created a topic on our forum, where I immediately told about the attempt to register by mistake... I think that people from 4alla just wanted to steal my account. , steal here, on our forum..... it didn’t work out... well, now they, under the guise of a "common" account, supposedly common, will steal all my Stories....
I was convinced once again , that she did the right thing by not writing a sequel...

[Pierro]

Natali_Natali,
Natasha, there’s one here .. under..
no matter who, in short..
yesterday he claimed that you.. ran away..

[Christmas_Christmas]

Natali_Natali,
nNatasha, there’s only one here.. not enough..
no matter who, in short..
yesterday he claimed that you.. ran away..

I didn’t run away... I’ve had a fever all week(((....

[Venus]

Natali_Natali, get well soon

[Pierro]

I didn’t run away... I’ve had a fever all week(((....

oh you.. poor thing..
Get well soon!

[Christmas_Christmas]

Natali_Natali, get well

thank you

I didn’t run away... I’ve had a fever all week(((....

oh you.. poor thing..
get well!

thank you... but I’m not at all poor thing... I just have a very weak throat... if anything happens, I immediately get sick....
and now I’m just one hundred percent sure that when the administrator of the 4all forum Oksanka, without my not only consent, but even a request, she created an account in my name on their forum, she just wanted to steal my account here... it didn’t work out... so they created a “similar” account anyway, so that now free to "take" all my Stories... otherwise why bother?

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Natasha, there’s only one.. under..
no matter who, in short..
yesterday he claimed that you.. ran away. .

so who said that.... poke my nose so that I know who... leave a link to the post

[Pierro]

so that now you can freely "take" all my Stories...

Well, people can’t do anything themselves.. all that remains is.. to steal. . what lies badly..)

[Christmas_Christmas]

Pierro,
reset the link to the posts the one who said that I left

[Pierro]

so who said that....

a man of a subtle soul..)
let’s not .. poke him.. he and so offended by everything and everyone..))

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Natali_Natali,
yes Varg is.. avatar in profile.. with a goatee..)

[Christmas_Christmas]

Pierro,
I’m not going to swear with this subtle person... I just want to see who exactly

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Pierro,
Another question, can the forum administrator see my account password? or is it not visible to anyone?

[Pierro]

I just want to see who exactly

well... a local narcissist..)

[Christmas_Christmas]

yes, it’s Varg.

now I’ll know
well, can the forum administrator “see” my password?

[Venus]

And my password, can the forum administrator "see ?

No

[Pierro]

one more question, can the forum administrator see my account password? or is it not visible to anyone?

of course, maybe
the other day I received a letter:
"Your password is 1234.. too simple"
had to add.. two more numbers..)

[Christmas_Christmas]

Strecoza, Pierro,
damn... so can the administrator see my password or not?

[Pierro]

Natali_Natali, мой -видят..

[Venus]

мой пароль или нет

Нет

[Hair shirt]

Why comment on them? I wrote them primarily for myself..... probably it was I who needed to remember my childhood.... I didn’t “tell” so much... I mean what is not related to sex... .
but that was then... and now I’ve generally lost interest in my Stories... absolutely... I no longer “see” the pictures before my eyes when I write... t
What’s the point? you can safely start criticizing... at least mix it with g@vnom... mix it with this too... it’s very easy, you don’t even need any special effort for this....
only I don’t care anymore. ..

I’ll pretend to believe that it is so...

[Christmas_Christmas]

Pierro, Strecoza,
you have already confused me... I just have an assumption, that when Oksanka allegedly created my account behind my back on her forum, and then suggested that I “break” the password, then naturally I would have entered the password there. the same as here, and since she created the account, but it would have somehow "loomed" that the password was changing... she would have seen it... and would have stolen my account here... I understand what it sounds like what nonsense...... but why bother so much and create an account there on the forum so similar to mine.

[Christmas_Christmas]

I’ll pretend that I believed that it was so...

believed in what? What is easy to "mix"?

[Pierro]

I understand that it sounds like nonsense...

no, I understand you perfectly..
I would go crazy if someone- then.. created an account for me..)